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#1 Some Haiku
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Winter's breath
A delicate breeze
Kindles a new hearth

Curious fog
A long winding road
Becomes solidarity everlasting


Heyo so I'm looking for some feedback. Refer to each of them as 1 or 2.
General questions
What do you think the haiku means?
What emotion do you get from the haiku?
Which one do you like better? Why?

Number 3

Spring flowers blossom
A rabbit leaps over the grass
Leaving the old warren

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1 = i like its literal transition of cold to warm! its very seasonal.

2 = Adventure! leads you into a beginning of a journey!


I like the second one because it rests a little longer than the first with the reader, as i mentioned above it makes you wonder what could lie beyond.

each emotion would be a chilling change on the horizon. the unknown is near.


side ? haikus are 5/7/5
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thanks for the feedback~ I'm focusing on a reader centred literary approach so I won't really be questioning response, I'll be taking them as they come.
I was concerned about the 5-7-5 form until I read an in-depth article about why contemporary haiku don't necessarily comply with this format. There are other more important elements which create a haiku.
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Also, I'm updating the first post with a third one I wrote today.
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