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I thought if I can make a Story also. I'm not done, but here is a start.
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Chapter1- Great Stop "I woke up with a bad dream. It was about my family. My family died when I was a baby. I don't want to talk about how they died. " It was 6:30 in the morning, September 14,2090. I was on a airplane and I was about to land in L.A. "You awake Evan," his brother Matthew said. "Ya, are we their yet?". "I don't know, can't wait until we see the Lakers and have a great vacation." A guy was looking at Matthew with a mean face. The guy stood up and grabbed a gun and shot Matthew. The guy had a gang and put everybody on the ground. People were scared and Evan was full of tears,Sad, when he saw Matthew. Evan snuck up on a guy and broke his neck. He grabbed a gun and shot the gang. The plane landed and it was rough. Finally, the plane landed. But we landed somewhere else. We landed on a U.F.O.


Chapter2- Good Luck! Everybody got out of the airplane and looked at the U.F.O. It was big and it was huge. I went inside and everything was damaged and broken. An alien was on the ground and it was breathing. It had a gun in it's hand. I grabbed it and the alien held my hand. He shot the gun and it missed me. I punched it's head and it didn't die so I took the gun and shot him. Another alien was alive and it ran to the door. The alien closed the door and it locked it. I tried to shoot the alien through the door, but the door was strong and indestructible. I was stuck inside the U.F.O. I heard a loud bang and I turned around. There was a huge swarm of aliens! Different Aliens!


Chapter3- Escape from Danger I was shocked. There was one door open. I ran as fast I can. An alien jumped on me. It was trying to bite me. I shot the alien and I got up and ran to the door. I closed the door and took a deep breath. I looked behind me and there was a man sitting on the ground. He was crying and I asked,"You ok sir." "Yes, who are you? Where did you come from?,"the man asked. "Do you want to come with me?,"I asked. "Sure."

We partnered up and I gave him a weapon. A knife. We ran out the room. I shot an alien and the man threw the knife to an alien. An alien unlocked the door and it said,"We will come back. We ordered the man to kill your brother. We will come back for you Evan, we will." I didn't understand why would them set me free. I thought and I finally noticed, they were bringing the whole army!

Chapter4- Trouble
The people and I went to a gas station in the middle of nowhere. The gas station was called 711. I went inside, also the people did. I stared at my favorite drink( Shocked ), smoothies. I got a smoothie and paid it. When I went outside I heard a weird sound. I went behind the building and I saw the swarm. I told everybody to run away. We went to the middle of the dessert. I looked around me and I didn't see nothing. Until I saw a (silent) an alien coming in. I thought,"Oh, it's just one." I was wrong, around the people and I, there was a huge swarm of aliens. Exclamation. I shouted with fear. U.F.O's were on top of us and a giant lizard. It was like Godzilla. pale affraid


Chapter5- Back-up As Even was fulled with fear, he heard helicopters coming, tanks, and trucks fulled with soldiers. They surrounded the aliens. I slowly grabbed the gun with fear. I shot an alien everybody started shooting. It was loud and bloody. I went outside of the circle. There was a mountain and I thought there is an army base there because I heard tanks. I climbed it. As I climbed the mountain, I finally reached the top of the mountain. I was shocked, there was an alien base.


Chapter6- Now is the Time As i told the commander of the army when they just finished the war, I told him about the base over the mountains. He hired me to be in the army and now I'm a soldier. My A.K.A name is Snowghost20. I was in the squad and the name of that squad is Alpha. I got my own gun and armor. They say that we will overrun them tomorrow.

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I woke up with a chill. My heart was breathing fast and I was ready for the war. I've met my squad and I made a new friend, Ellie. Him and I were like partners now.Everybody packed for the war, got in the helicopters and we are going to war.


Last Chapter- The End? Everybody in the army arrived ontop of the mountain. The aliens told us to meet them in a desert called, Static. We went there also the aliens did. We fought and we won. We took over the base and the war was over. Peace was good. citiazans were fine, but there was one problem. Why isn't the U.F.O gone?



Thank you guys for reading this. I worked on it a lot.
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@snowghost-

You go boy...
I've been watching how this story grows each time I check your post.
Just like I told GeM?N! let it flow... you can always edit stuff later.

Also, read it out loud from start to finish
so you can hear what the other person will read
to know if it sounds the way you it to be heard.

keep it going ^,^
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I think after this story, I might make another one. It is going to more exciting. Twisted Evil
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Or am i wrong? (your forum pic)
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@daf - yup yup that's Briorios for snowghost's "current" avatar...
he's always changing it. ^,^
(ex machina was tha bomb biggity!)

@snowghost ~ so what's going to happen to the UFO?
or is that the way you wanted it to end... with a cliffhanger ^,^
before you start another story I say you should clean this one up,
make it a smooth story to read for the reader...
add some more detail and Point Break will be super awesome!!!
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your drawing me in with the epic story line, please continue
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@SNOW - you know we are waiting on you ^,^
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I'm starting in two weeks or over the weekends hope. It will be called. NA I SHOULD NOT TELL YOU! IT WILL BE A SURPRISE!


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I couldn't help but comment on that pic you posted....
It as to be photoshoped because when chics are hatched they're all wet and slimy. Not fluffy ^ ^
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